Aww, that's a cute story. And I left more detailed feedback over on it.

Like I said, my inspiration for this came from some thing goldy_dollar said in her recap of LotTL, to which my reply, among other things, included the idea of Jack beta reading for him (although the irony that I have the Master with a beta reader while I can't seem to work up the inclination to get one myself is maybe noteworthy).